I`m a recent member and did expactly as you did, Posting songs just to get an some feedback on a few things I wrote. There are alot of very accomplished songwriters visiting this site.

For what it`s worth, I liked the songs and as said earlier it`s hard to judge a song solely on it`s lyrics. But I assume you just wanted an opinion on the lyrics, since that`s all we came see.

Especially liked

I was young and cynical
You were an old romantic fool

Don`t know if you have music for them, but little changes to make them flow better, will come naturally. If certain word are tricky to sing, just make the slight nessessary changes.