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GUEST,Shanghaiceltic | The Wiser Maid (please critique!) (39) | RE: THE WISER MAID (please critique!) | 19 Aug 05 |
I think you shold try and keep the line with the ship returning somehow in some form. It expresses a longing for the lass to see her loved one and seems to me to be part of the crux of the story even though she refuses him later. The imagery is very good. |