The alternate last verse going around 'I wish some Sergeant-Major would send for me in time'
makes loads more sense then the line about the 'Queen of England.'

Also for clarity sake, the repetitive chorus line should read: 'from the clear daylight of dawn' i.e. getting up early (as 'from the clear daylight to dawn' makes no sense.

There are also two verses going around about Sweeny. Put them both in the same song and they contradict each other:

O' hear me gallant Sweeny for your fate I do bemoan
O' the rain is pelting on your face amongst the rocks and stones
Your work is hard and troublesome, though your step is like the fawn
but I know that you won't be able to plough the Rocks of Bawn

My curse upon you Sweeney, for you have me nearly robbed
You're sitting by your fireside with your dudgeen in your gob
You're sitting by your fireside from the clear daylight till dawn
And I know you will never be able to plough the Rocks of Bawn

My solution: if you want to use both verses, you have to change the name in the second verse. As Sweeny is an Irish name, I suggest changing the 2nd name to something English (Cromwell? Who was the King/Queen during this time? If anyone knows, email me) ) Anyway, you get my drift: Sweeny, in one verse, is working the land like the singer of the song, and in the other is the one responsible for profiting from the work of others. Also keeping them both Irish names is confusing, unless you want to suggest that fellow Irishmen were responsible for this injustice.
J.