Okay. I've had a day or so to test drive this, and here's what I learned.
1. Sometimes I start the line on the downbeat, sometimes on the upbeat. If this throws you, add an "Oh" or a "Well" or your favorite pickup word where it is missing.
For example, the first line of the first verse has has a pickup beat, as does the second. Not the third. So if you want the third to scan the same way, add "And" or "But" or whatever.

2. I don't like this line in verse 2:
"Around the glass stained table". It's irrelevant, and it doesn't scan.
How about "As the years pass by, And time and trials..."

3. this line in verse 3 has too many sylables:
"Singing in the last chord"
Here are some alternatives. Which do you like best?
"Singing in the chord."
"Ringing ..."
"Sounding..."
"Filling the last chord"

4. I go back and forth on the last line of the 3rd verse.
Is it "And know he's...." or is it "And hear him....."?

What do you think?
Blessings,
Barbara