Rapaire, I don't want you to think I mean to impugn your style; you're generally very readable.

But I urge you (and everyone else) to get (if you don't have it) The
Elements of Style, and to actually read it. It's "the Little book" (note cap), which pleasantly and easily sets out an approach to a readable and communicative writing style. Easy and entertaining reading, as I assess it, which illustrates and makes good sense out of good writing habits.

After forty years, I'm on my third battered and dogeared copy. And I've given away a number of copies as gifts.

Dave Oesterreich