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Thread #86553   Message #1612934
Posted By: TheBigPinkLad
24-Nov-05 - 12:59 PM
Thread Name: BS: Proofreading Help Needed ASAP
Subject: RE: BS: Proofreading Help Needed ASAP
CAMOUFLAGE



8. "You are not only a dozey platoon," he roared, "but a blind one to boot. Every mother's son of you would have been dead and never have known what hit you!"" [remove] We sobered immediately. Not only was it embarrassing to have failed the lesson of the film, but to have the other platoon hear us addressed as "dozey" was too much.


12. "This is not a game, lads; your lived could depend on what you learn here today."


14. On the left was a hedgerow separating the Army's land from that planted in wheat by a local farmer.

15. After almost reaching the buildings we had not found anyone, although shouts of "Bang, Bang," accompanied by laughter from the trainees and yelling from the sergeants and corporals, occasionally drifted up to us on the warm summer breeze from the floor of the valley.

22. Entering the field I started for the ridge on my right. I turned when I heard running footsteps behind me, [replace with period] It was a member of my squad.

32. A meadow lark [no meadow larks in UK; skylarks and meadow pipits, probably means the former], disturbed from its nest, aroused from the long grass and, singing its beautiful song, flew straight up ever higher, until it was lost to view.

47. "What's become of our fine British Army... It's certainly not like the old days!" he observed to no one in particular.

57. We had not waited long before we were ushered into the Captain's office, escorted by a sergeant carrying two file folders.

58. "This report says you fell asleep while you were camouflaged," the Captain said, glancing at the contents of my folder which was by far the larger of the two.

60. "And you had to walk back to Barracks and were over two hours late," he continued.

63. My companion was shaken as we left the Company Headquarters.

64. He didn't; [cut] answer.