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Thread #86553   Message #1613312
Posted By: JudyB
25-Nov-05 - 12:21 AM
Thread Name: BS: Proofreading Help Needed ASAP
Subject: RE: BS: Proofreading Help Needed ASAP
CAMOUFLAGE

14. Spread out before us was a good-sized valley covered with knee-high weeds and grass. On the left was a hedgerow separating the Army's land from that planted in wheat by a local farmer. To the right was a ridge topped by small trees, saplings, and bushes; approximately a half mile down the valley were three small, one-storey buildings.

51. "It's about time you two showed up," he admonished. "Didn't you hear the whistles blowing calling everyone in? We even sent people out looking for you." I thought it prudent not to tell him that if we had heard the whistles we would not have missed the return trip. After receiving our lecture on being absent from our platoon without leave and the punishment forthcoming, my companion was sent to his hit - is this right? and I reported to the kitchen for my work.

52. I was greeted by the huge cook sergeant (Who - who I privately called Sgt. Chins because of the stack of chins sprouting from his collar), working at his always-cluttered desk.

63. My companion was shaken as we left the Company Headquarters. "Don't worry," I consoled him. It's -need quote before It's really not that bad, and we're not allowed to leave the barracks anyway."


SATURDAY RIDE 1

nothing not already noted

SATURDAY RIDE 2

nothing not already noted

SATURDAY RIDE 3

14. From out of nowhere came a pound note waving in my face, accompanied by a voice saying, "How about riding through does this need a "the"? Regimental Headquarter company office building?"

17. Miraculously, a number of hands next appeared, grasping a like number of pound notes. My brain now suggested I doe - die on the spot. My heart sank so low in my body, I was sure it was attempting to follow my brain's advice. But my mouth-my false Judas mouth-opened again unbidden. "That's more like it," my mouth said. "How much is there?"

20. I weighed the alternatives that my insane mouth had left me. I could offer to pay off the wager immediately and spend the next five weeks penniless, not to mention irretrievably losing face among my peers. Either one would be a terrible fate for a nineteen-year-old soldier. Or... I could ride through the building full of officers, sergeants major, sergeants, and other administrative people-to certain capture and resulting punishment. It seems to me as if the sentence starting "Either one" should come after this sentence - if "either" refers to paying the wager or losing face, they sound more like "both" than "either" - but the whole thing may just be his style.

Good night,
JudyB