You said corrections are welcome, I hope you meant that and are not offended. Having listened to it again with your words as a very welcome baseline there's a few words & one line which I think need changing.

2nd verse   so they "came" forth
3rd verse   such a storm "as" you never
In the "vale" of Eden
6th verse 3rd line "Oh fool we will tear you to pieces right here"
9th verse and "left" them to stand

That said thanks again for doing the major work in the first place