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Thread #157237   Message #3710015
Posted By: GUEST,Uncle_DaveO
19-May-15 - 11:48 AM
Thread Name: Grammar for Songwriters
Subject: RE: Grammar for Songwriters
Airymouse commented:

For poor on'ry people like you and like I...
I wonder as I wander out under the sky.


As you might surmise, I don't like this rhyme.

That verse can be "fixed", with a little imagination:
Here is the song, as I've slightly rewritten it, calling
it "I Wonder, in Winter Sports in Scotland":

I wonder as I prepare to go downhill ski
How Jesus, our Savior, did come for to dee*   
For pitiable people like you and like me
I wonder as I prepaaaaare to go downhill ski.

See how easy that was? I don't have time just now to
finish it, but now that you see how easy it is, you
can do it too!

*(that's the Scottish part)

Dave Oesterreich