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Thread #163002   Message #3884209
Posted By: Mr Red
24-Oct-17 - 05:05 AM
Thread Name: Dodgy Artistic Licence?
Subject: RE: Dodgy Artistic Licence?
later on we'll conspire, as we dream by the fire

Merriom Webster - Rhyming of conspire IMNSHO there is only one rhyme that comes close in meaning and desire doesn't convey the sentiments needed. I find conspire to be not only fitting, but very very clever in saying more than that number of words would normally. It makes you remember it, so in that context it worked on the OP'er!

What about Carole King's "Call out my Name, you know wherever I am" - she could have said aim it is technically and emotionally apt, but would it be as powerful? The song is not sharp edged, precise - it is just there for you!

One man's (or manette) dodgy is another song-writers assonance. It softens the flow. Cole Porter had a different method, enjambment. He usually made the rhyme perfect, but put it before the end of the line (or meaning/pause for breath).

If the song hangs together it is art. If the rest of the song is clunky - OK - it is naff.
Ballad of Bonnie & Clyde (sung by Georgie Fame) Dewlap bag should have been Burlap bag and the songwriters realised after the record was released. People wrote in! But they needed a bag for the story and assumed that the mental picture they knew to be correct was actually not the right word. It was a good song, certainly a good singer singing it.