The first thing I notice is I don’t understand the \relative bit (at least not yet) and wonder if that is the best way. I have to raise the first note in the second line by an octave or things start to go low from that point...
Do I really have to put the flats in each time or am I missing something? Notes are coming out as naturals if I don’t.
It’s not immediately apparent to me how to display the time as 4/4 or how to change the beaming to match what I’m trying to copy.