Matt - what's cool? The story, the music, the way I used your character? What? (I "need to know"!)

Amergin - I know, I'm having a lot of problems with the dialect, as I don't speak it... Criticism is good.

This story is only in the "draft" stage, really. I tried to put in enough dialect to let people know that it's supposed to be there... (Hope that the lack isn't too painful.) Some parts will have to be changed for the final version. And I would appreciate *any* help with that!