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Thread #36442   Message #503116
Posted By: KingBrilliant
10-Jul-01 - 12:09 PM
Thread Name: BS-ish:contemplating someone elses navel
Subject: RE: BS-ish:contemplating someone elses navel
So - its possible to write a diary-like about a fictitious person? And that would be one which was introspective and detached from any outside meaning or influence?
And then again it is possible to write a non-diary-like song from a personal point of view - being a song that had some connections or implications beyond the purely personal?
SO - for example - if my songs are telling a story or illustrating a point, then they are probably not going to be taken as navel-gazing? That sounds like good news! X-fingers anyway

So, just to live dangerously...... here's one of said songs. Its supposed to be a bit menacing (stalker/unrequited love type thing) - but I wonder whether it just maunders on & doesn't get the point over - that's what started me really thinking about the difference between what I meant & what was actually registering. Its the one where I lost faith half way through singing it.

title: Pick Up The Line

chorus 1:
The network's on fire
I'm burning up wire
To call you
My heart is on hold
There's a hole in my soul
When I call you
And you can call me a fool
You can call me a big fool
Because I've fallen for you
And I've fallen big too
Pick up the line

verse 1:
I have never seen your face
Never heard your voice
But I've read you mind
Never touched your hand
Never touched you life
Like you touch mine
And I can't let a day go
Without letting you know
I am still here
What you want, if you want
Whatever you want
I am still here
Pick up the line

chorus 2:
The network's on fire
I'm burning up wire
To call you
My heart is on hold
There's a hole in my soul
When I call you
And you can call me a fool
You can call me a blind fool
Because I'm blinded by you
I'm right behind you
Pick up the line

verse 2 :
It's a sad thing to begin
To love
And can't stop
You have planted a seed
Of a man in my heart
And its a bitter crop
And I can't let a day go
Without letting you know
I am still here
What you want, if you want
Whatever you want
I am still here
Pick up the line

chorus 3: The network's on fire
I'm burning up wire
To call you
My heart is on hold
There's a hole in my soul
When I call you
And you can call me a fool
You can call me a dangerous fool
Because I've fallen for you
And I'm right behind you
Pick up the line

I know I'll regret asking - but does it veer to diaryish or is it point outward??? - its not a favourite or anything, so you can be brutal if needs be....

Kris