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Thread #45039   Message #665510
Posted By: Genie
08-Mar-02 - 10:05 PM
Thread Name: Awkward rhymes
Subject: RE: Awkward rhymes
Sharon, That's awesome, too! LOL!

Mary,

To be correct (though it may not make the poem any better as art), Hal David's lyric is "... You get enough germs to catch pneumonia. After you do, he'll never phone ya."

McGrath, what do you call it when the vowel soundsconsonant sounds don't? Is that "assonance?"
An example is the "paradise"/"tree of life" verse given above (from "All My Trials").

Personally, I don't necessarily mind either of these para-rhymes if the final poem/lyric pleases me. But, I often hear songs with this sort of half-rhyme that sound to me as though the songwriter just hadn't wanted to spend any time crafting the song.

Genie

I just looked up "consonance" in a fascinating book called "A readers guide to literary terms", to check I'd got it right - and the example the gave was from Emily Dickinson:

'T was later when the summer went Than when the cricket came, And yet we knew that gentle clock Meant nought but going home.

'T was sooner when the cricket went Than when the winter came Yet that pathetic pendulum Keeps esoteric time.

It wouldn't have been oarticularly hard for her to rewrite those lines with rhymes - but I think the poem would have lost something.