Hi Nightwing--didn't know you hung out here! Yes please, PM me.Peg-- it just came out that way. No chorus, but I don't mind minor changes if it doesn't unbalance the sense of the song... The Sun and Moon theme is what holds it together for me, so it would feel like any refrain would echo that, but play with it and see what happens.
With all this tunefulness around I might have to ask the Muse for more words... a sequel...
Bekki