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GUEST,Frank When It Doesn't Rhyme (33) RE: When It Doesn't Rhyme 22 Feb 05

Rhyming is a device to help compel the listener to the words. It can be overused as many interior rhymes are, but interior rhymes serve as a rhythmic agent. Too many songwriters get lazy when they could use rhymes. Imagery may be more important than rhymes but a rhyme scheme can punch up the imagery even more. I don't like identities or false rhymes because I feel that it calls attention to the songwriter's laziness. The imagery has to be so good that it overshadows the false rhyme or identity. I don't like accents on the wrong syl-AH-ble either such as rhyming a feminine ending rhyme with a masculine ending one. Ex. Being free and ener-gee. (To me this is laziness). "Entropy" is a better rhyme for "energy". Or three short words would work such as "Ben or me". The three words ending with "me" being a rhyme for "energy". Or "tenor key" would work too for a musical reference.

I like to see cliches avoided at all costs unless it's part of the humor or making a point of being a cliche. After Christopherson, so many pop songs started in on "making it through the night". "Moon-June" is the classic forties cliche.

False rhymes better have a good reason for them.

I like the idea of some lines not having rhymes and some that do.

In my song: "In The Valley" the first stanza runs like this.

When the sparrow wings his way across the sky.
And the wind sings through the valley.
With the sunrise, the snow begins to thaw
on the lea side of the valley.

(No rhymes on the first part of this stanza)

On the mountain, the springtime waters flow
Down the hillside, to reach the crops below

(Rhymes on those two lines)

It's the right time for a soul to be reborn
When the dawn breaks in the valley.

(No rhymes on the last two lines.)

So I think you can mix it up and have it intelligible. Some might disagree but in the final cut, it depends on how it works as a song to sing.


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