(sorry about not replying sooner)
ElwynnMaxon said: "...I must agree that it is a bit wordy and long winded. ...If something is written as to be unclear without deciphering it, what was the point? "
Choosing how to phrase particular information is like choosing the play list for a performance. The skilled writer/performer tailors the offering to the intended audience.
The original author that was quoted apperently thought the best way to reach her target audience was to write in that wordy (one might say pedantic?) style. It was not written for Mudcatters - just like a Brittney Spears concert is not aimed at 'Catters (for which I am quite grateful!)
Hope it worked for her with her target audience to convince them of the problem. Unfortunately, WE aren't the ones that need convincing.