I echo Seamus and others in saying that diction is important -- I wanted to understand the words and couldn't. It helps that you've posted them here.
The one I liked best was the third one. Why? I liked the rhythmic groove and energy (and maybe that extra D-chord, too.
Keep at it -- I wrote three songs a day when I was thirteen or so and now I write a good one every few years (a really good one).