I agree totally with the sentiment but doubt it would become a standard. The first verse is not melodic to the ear. Last one you added I would substitute the line about sartorial for something else. I would fill in the blanks and rearrange things. I am a loving memory, Of a father or a son, A permanent reminder Of each and every one. I'm paper or enamel I'm old or shining new, I'm a way of saying thank you, To every one --- I am not a badge of honour, I am not a racist smear, --- --- I am not ---- Of conflict or of war. I am not a paper ornament Or a token I am more. I am a humble poppy A Reminder to you all, That courage faith and honour, Will stand where heroes fall. Just a simple red reminder ----- The hope of generations That they gave to gain a peace.
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