but this stanza is not bad.... needs some work on the third line...


"What do I want of threads, when verses share
such rhyming convolutions I have told?
Why do words in patterns so compare,
When ego seeks through verse to then unfold?"

How about "Why do words in such patterns so compare,"?


and the couplet would be better as

"Yet, I keep on, and still stick out my neck
That I might find publisher with a cheque. "


I am not sure there is anything in the first or third stanza to work with....

8-{E