Hello Cromdubh, and welcome to Mudcat. Yes, people do often post lyrics to their original songs here, so don't be shy about it (I'm a songwriter myself and have posted several songs).

I second GUEST's suggestion: look carefully at the songs that you love and see if you can pick out characteristics that make them good and use them yourself.

How much time do you have to mess around on the computer? There's plenty of old threads here that might be useful to you. Here's a fairly recent one: What is a good song and why? Or put "songwrit" in the filter (so it catches both "songwriting" and "songwriters") and set the age to "All", and you'll find dozens of threads to browse through.

My concern about "Cerebrus Blues" is basically that I don't understand what it's about.

Marion