Thanks to you all, any more comments are more than welcome. Aine, even though english is my native lanagauge my schooling in it was next to nil (inner city school of hard knocks) what I know is self taught & I do know where my short comings lie. It's not so much the song or the way it's being expressed but is it correct, which I think isn't everything but it does count. Thanks Jeri, that makes sense, I'll see about tieing that up. Another reason for asking for feedback is that I'm sure many songwriters think what they're singing is great when they may be very far off the mark without knowing it, it's very hard to be objectional about one's own piece & if it's not understood it doesn't make sense. Thanks again all, Barry