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Thread #83915   Message #1545302
Posted By: frogprince
18-Aug-05 - 08:45 PM
Thread Name: The Wiser Maid (please critique!)
Subject: RE: THE WISER MAID (please critique!)
make it, "upon the shore, waiting his ship to sight", and the meter works; as for me, apart from picking a nit that small, I give it a big thumbs up.

um, maybe still a rhythmn problem: "his homing ship to sight"?