The Mudcat Café TM
Thread #83915   Message #1569474
Posted By: MMario
23-Sep-05 - 04:25 PM
Thread Name: The Wiser Maid (please critique!)
Subject: RE: THE WISER MAID (please critique!)
looking at this better late then never I see

"But I am not at liberty to walk with any man
Until my true-love John returns from his ship's command"

and immediatley think:

"But I am not at liberty to walk with any man
Until my true-love Johnny returns once more to land"

but that's neither here nor there...

Can you post the completed version?