The Mudcat Café TM
Thread #86553   Message #1612024
Posted By: TheBigPinkLad
23-Nov-05 - 12:28 PM
Thread Name: BS: Proofreading Help Needed ASAP
Subject: RE: BS: Proofreading Help Needed ASAP
WHERE ARE POLICEMEN WHEN YOU NEED ONE?

1. Sergeant-Major Green turned his motorcycle from the road and on to the concrete apron at the front of the motor-pool workshops, coming to a stop in front of the bay in which I was working.

4. "Alright, Sergeant," I answered, trying to keep suspicion out of my voice.

7. "Unfortunately I haven't had time to properly clean it," he continued, "and I've already had two bad reports in a row." [remove quotes] Do you think you could help me out?"

11. "I tell you what I can do for you, Sergeant-Major," I said. "I'm not too busy this morning, so I'll take some time and clean and wash your b9ke for you before I inspect it."

22. "Well. [replace period with comma] Sergeant..." I hesitated.

24. "Well, Sergeant-Major, I have a girl friend [one word, see 30] in Makenham,


31. The bike and equipment were available whenever I needed them, and consequently y love life was good.

32. Only once was my police imitation seriously threaten3ed with exposure.

38. Quickly I noted the Lieutenant's shoulder patches, which identified him as being from another regiment.