Back again, and have been given much food for thought. Thank you. A few comments:
"However it *is* verging on the kind of song that the Bastard Nazi Prickheads would like, so be warned that it might be misconstrued..."

This didn't occur to me. I thought the song was being noble, by calling for democracy and equality for England, and I thought this is how it read. However, I may have been naive in thinking this.

"More than one verse without the word "democracy" might be nice"

Do you know I never realised. Perhaps this indicates how "word blind" people (especially me) can be.

"England and Wales already have a Parliament and it's in Westminster, hence the "Welsh Assembly" rather than "Welsh Parliament"

Well I'm in disagreement with this. Everything that is passed on Westminster can be voted on by all mps wherever they are from (including Scotland), even when it is for English only legislation. Hence it is the British parliament. So there ;0)

I also thought the content was being specific, thought trying to find rhymes for the West Lothian question and the Barnett formula is not easy.

"So, all in all, a poorly written song, but also a poorly thought out song. perhaps the two are related."

Poorly written maybe, but I don't think poorly though out. Maybe I should give a reference to my opinions, though it's clear that opinions around this subject will differ.

So taking on board what's been said, my challenge now is to write a protest song that has better rhyming, more specific, can't be misconstrued as racist and isn't repetitive! A challenge! Thank you.

Brian S