The Mudcat Café TM
Thread #17802   Message #173225
Posted By: GUEST,flattop
03-Feb-00 - 09:47 PM
Thread Name: BS: Wake Up Call
Subject: RE: BS: Wake Up Call
Althought the original premise of this thread lacked merit, I ran the last four messages from Sorcha and from the kat/ through an old version of rightwriter. The program points out clear differences in style. Sorcha's writing is more succinct, while kat's is more descriptive.

OVERALL CRITIQUE FOR: sorcha.txt

READABILITY INDEX: 6.56 Readers need a 7th grade level of education to understand. Total Number of Words in Document: 201 Total Number of Words within Sentences: 201 Total Number of Sentences: 14 Total Number of Syllables: 282

STRENGTH INDEX: 0.57 The strength of delivery is good, but can be improved.

DESCRIPTIVE INDEX: 0.56 The use of adjectives and adverbs is in the normal range.

JARGON INDEX: 0.00

SENTENCE STRUCTURE RECOMMENDATIONS: 1. Most sentences contain multiple clauses. Try to use more simple sentences.

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OVERALL CRITIQUE FOR: kat.txt

READABILITY INDEX: 6.38 Readers need a 6th grade level of education to understand. Total Number of Words in Document: 441 Total Number of Words within Sentences: 440 Total Number of Sentences: 26 Total Number of Syllables: 592

STRENGTH INDEX: 0.33 The writing can be made more direct by using: - the active voice - shorter sentences - fewer weak phrases - more common words - less slang

DESCRIPTIVE INDEX: 0.78 The use of adjectives and adverbs is in the normal range.

JARGON INDEX: 0.00

SENTENCE STRUCTURE RECOMMENDATIONS: 1. Most sentences contain multiple clauses. Try to use more simple sentences. 14. Consider using more predicate verbs.