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Thread #91510   Message #1741101
Posted By: Richard Bridge
15-May-06 - 02:36 PM
Thread Name: State of the Mudcat Union Talkin' Blues
Subject: RE: State of the Mudcat Union Talkin' Blues
FIrst and second line last verse need more syllables.    Maybe

Rollin' down hill from the Hammond to the Sham...

Gives the advantage of the half-rhyme of "sham" to "..anche"

In fact scansion generally could do with a bit of polishing.

Over to the Mudcat for developoment of this fine work!