I wouldn't say flawed Jim Lad, in three days you have a song that just needs a tune and possibly a refrain. At the risk of getting cut up I would suggest that Swallow is substituted for Sparrow and walking on broken glass I would re-arrange the first line of the last verse to read "So now I'll say goodbye ,my love" (dunno why)

I like the idea of Highway of Tears, I will look on the net as you recommend.

Dave Wynn