The Mudcat Café TM
Thread #19577   Message #200684
Posted By: M. Ted (inactive)
24-Mar-00 - 10:44 AM
Thread Name: Song writing questions
Subject: RE: Song writing questions
Oh, I forgot to attach my name and claim of authorship, to "The Devil Isn't Ugly",composed in a trice, a trifling bit of nonce verse, but still, it's all that I have--

But seriously, Homeless,the last line is bit cumbersome--when you write in that sort of polysllabic scan, you're lyrics need to seem more effortless--I played with it, and got:

"And a wicked smile extended crost his face's flaccid girth"

Which I humbly offer, not to supplant the gift of your Muse, but only to inspire you to greater heights of..oh, well, you know what I mean....