This song worked well for our old friend Joe Theriault, and I'm getting quite fond of it. I've now recorded a slightly revised version of it which is newly posted to my website.
I finally replaced "Who was caulking it off on the deck" with "who was doozing away on the deck" as being less distracting. My bandmates kept looking as if they were about to burst into loud guffaws, which kind of spoiled the mood of the song.