I'm sorry I shoul have noticed the I loved a lass had already been corrected.

I'd like to submit the following version of Sweet Child, I've make a few corrections which I think are correct. There is only one verse that I'm really not sure of but I think that my version is better than the previous one.

And I've thought about a man
With us in his love
Who sheds his tears upon every mortal soul
I wonder does he yearn
Sweet child, for death to come for him

The first three lines are very unclear. "Love" in the second line could be "life", but doesn't make much sense to me. I've tried to isolate both Bert's and Jacqui's voices. I'm not absolutely sure if the last doesn't end "for death to comfort him". I prefer "come for him".

I think this follows quite well after the previous verse, perhaps as a reference to Christ, although theologically I'm not at all sure what a priest would make of Christ 'yearning for death'.

Sweet Child

You've been working so hard all day
Won't you take your rest?
You've been driving my blues away
Now it is my turn
Come hide beneath my wings
Sweet child, it may not be so long

Well, I may be a-drinking hard
Like a fish that swims
And I could be riding high
Mark me floating by
And if the rain does fall
Sweet child, I would not let you drown

Well, I would not care to see untruth in your eyes
I would not care to know where your heart does lie
I've try to trust my heart
But my eyes are pale and weary

Sweet child, come to me now, let me take your hand
Well, I do not know you well, yet I tried so hard
Through four and twenty years
Sweet child, I still don't understand

Well, I've heard there are great men
Who could save our souls
With kind and gentle hearts
And love is their goal
I really want to know
Sweet child, who could shoot them down

And I've thought about a man
With us in his love
Who sheds his tears upon every mortal soul
I wonder does he yearn
Sweet child, for death to come for him

And I once did see a child, she did sit and cry
Where has the pretty flower in the darkness gone?
In the summer you shall see
Sweet child, I guess it won't be long

Won't you lay yourself down and rest
Let your mind relax
And won't you cuddle into the night
I will guide your path
Well, I may not be here long
'Cause I got a feeling to be gone