I've looked at several of them, and they seem fairly understandable, though not what I'd consider idiomatic English, here and there seeming a little clumsy in terms of how a native English speaker would say the same thing. Which is not necessarily bad.

In a few places I thought of what I considered a more idiomatic version of a line or two, but realized that what I might suggest would dramatically change the line length, and it may be that you wanted to stay more or less with the form of the original song. It's possible, of course, that my suggested changes would actually change the meaning because I had not fully understood what you presented.

If you were a Mudcat member, I would go into this deeper, with suggestions, in what we on Mudcat call a PM, a Personal Message, but I don't know that you want to go into all that in a public thread. I would be glad to try to help in either of those ways.

Dave Oesterreich