some more minor corrections (many of the mistakes are ones of tense):

"clear-skinned smiles"

The Friday night charades of you/were spent on one more beautiful"

"who call to say, come dance with me/and murmur vague obscenities"

"in debentures of quality"


"their small town eyes will gape at you/in dull surprise"


"we all play the game and win, we dare...."

"they call and say come dane with me/and murmur vague obscenities"