If these are early attempts, I would say that you are going to do very well. I enjoyed the song, found the guitar playing to be clean and effective, and I really enjoyed listening to your voice, as well as your phrasing. On the techical side, I heard the things that johnross points out as well, but I have to tell you, you did a great job. For the future, I hope you understand that it is the desire to correct these small things that make the difference between a nice recording and a recording that sounds like it was done by a pro.

All the best,

Mick