WAV, I suggest you try 'repatriating'--that is, deleting-- all words in your verse that are not of Anglo-Saxon origin and not using those words again.

The point that the language you use is itself the product of centuries of cultural exchange and human movement would be immediately evident.

Language itself affirms that we are one species with a capacity to be enriched by borrowing from each other's cultures.

A lot of the unique expressiveness of English comes from its vast vocabulary. Song preceded language in human evolution; and music no less than language is enriched by assimilating new ingredients.