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Thread #113211   Message #2488361
Posted By: Will Fly
08-Nov-08 - 09:15 AM
Thread Name: The Weekly Walkabout (part 2.)
Subject: RE: The Weekly Walkabout (part 2.)
More bilge from DF, alias WAV:

Back when we became defenders
    (We have plainly been attackers),
Defenders' blood, sweat and years
    Were paid to keep a good home-way -
A way yet to be part stealth-blown,
    As mass immigration gained-sway
And as we slipped as maintainers.


"And we slipped as maintainers" is yet another example of your leaden ear and your complete lack of any poetic talent. I've also noticed your utterly pointless use of the hyphen. I could just about stomach a hyphen in the phrase "stealth-blown" - but why in God's name use one in "gained-sway", or "home-way" for that matter? It's idiotic. My guess is that you do it because you think it dignifies your words and makes it look Poetic with a capital P or Lyrical with a capital L.

As for the message in the so-called poem - and I suppose we have to be grateful that there is some visible message - it stinks. It implies that all the poor sods who died in wars were doing no more than protecting their culture, and that their efforts were undermined by stealthy, mass immigration.

What crap.