Dan-

Sounds as if you've got a good recording set-up, and editing ability.

I find it hard to judge music quality from my computer's speaker, especially MP3 files. When I'm working with my own recording I swap between headphones (AKG-271) and a set of old KLM speakers (more indulgent than my headphones!).

I'm thinking I'd like to hear this song sung at a slightly faster pace. The phrasing also doesn't seem seasoned yet. How long have you worked with this song and have you performed it in public?

Cheerily,
Charley Noble