Indeed. But at least my attempt is metrical, which is what guest,Murphy said he was after – and, in my voice at any rate, my Englished verses seem to work more or less adequately, in terms of fitting the stresses and vowel-lengths to Schubert's melody. To judge from the two English versions I have to hand (editions published by Schirmer and by Paterson), it would seem to be a common decision to compromise the rhyme-scheme of the original German in the attempt to produce a metrically acceptable English song.

There is, of course, nothing to stop you, guest,Murphy or anyone else writing his/her own translation: any of which would no doubt be more successful than mine.

In the meantime, is guest,Murphy still out there?!? Have we helped at all?