The Mudcat Café TM
Thread #25318   Message #3026787
Posted By: sian, west wales
08-Nov-10 - 12:16 PM
Thread Name: Lyr Add: Strike the Bell (Ron Shuttleworth)
Subject: RE: Lyr Add: Strike the Bell
Sorry, Nige! You published this while I was off at our weekend course and I've been playing catch-up ever since. Great stuff! May I make a couple of suggestions?

V1. Gwenno knitted socks by the fire heaped with coal

V2. "Mam was set to quarrel, like a woman from the choir" LOL! Really? Is this the new benchmark for madwomen?

V5: Having spoken QUIET? words through that little key hole.

Really really good! You do like to cram the syllables in, don't you? Make sure your dentures are in good 'n' solid!

sian