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Twilight in Barakeesh

I had a listen - in fact I had two listens. My main crit is that I can't really hear your voice as it's drowned out - not so much by the piano but by the synthesised instrument (is it supposed to be an oboe or a clarinet?) that you're singing along to.

You should remix if you can, otherwise re-do - but, whichever, without the solo instrument. Otherwise it's impossible to make any real judgement.