It's not a matter of "thinking" there's something wrong with it. Anyone who listens to the MIDI here while reading the lyrics will quickly spot the problem; the last four syllables (of the second verse as printed) have no notes to sing 'em to. The tune just stops dead four notes shy of the end. I think my solution (link in first post in this thread) solves the problem, though I'm not sure if it's the solution Alan or whoever would choose.

Liland