That's a pretty faithful and sympathetic translation , Will.

What I really dislike is a total departure from the original, eg La Mer/Beyond the Sea, Que reste-t-il de nos amours?/I wish you love (where did "bluebirds in the spring" come from?.) Les Feuilles Mortes/Falling Leaves isn't much better....

As an old lady once said to me "Tout en Anglais est moche"