I really like the song! But you asked for criticism. Here it is: "So he upped and joined the Army. Why? Well, nevermind." In my opinion this line doesn't scan well. How about "Why? It makes no nevermind"?
"So he upped and joined the Army. Why? Well, nevermind." In my opinion this line doesn't scan well. How about "Why? It makes no nevermind"?