The Mudcat Café TM
Thread #7359   Message #44503
Posted By: BSeed
06-Nov-98 - 03:58 PM
Thread Name: Songwriter's Forum
Subject: RE: Songwriter's Forum
MMario, as Barbara formatted it it's quite beautiful. I wish you could post your melody. One thing, I think the correct form of the verb (it's been a long time since I've read the old King James Bible) is goest.

And Barbara, just a couple of places where I disagree on your formatting:

But two metal bands about our hands
Are but the outward sign.

fits the metric pattern of the verses, and

United through thick and through thin,
Two made one forever.

which I assume was just a failure to insert a break after thin.