Actually I appreciate all the suggestions for lyric changes, and I am working on possible changes ... but yu see there is a lot more in the verse then simple the rhyming lines, I am actually telling the relevant bits I care to retell within the ryhmes, so I will probably make some dramatic changes to the first verses, if I change them.

... and to "GUEST/Not an Aubrey hornblower" I must say I understand the issues with O'Brian's style, for modern American tastes the language can be laborious - but I must say; once I dug in I found the use of language elegant! I think much of the value of O'Brian's stories is the beauty of the language, however wordy it may seem to our American cultured ears!