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Thread #35298   Message #483604
Posted By: GUEST,SharonA
14-Jun-01 - 05:55 PM
Thread Name: Song Challenge! - Part 54
Subject: RE: SONG CHALLENGE! - Part 54
Áine:

I'm so very sorry, but I must decline your S.L.O.B. award for the verse in my second song. Because I had made so many corrections to my hard copy, I neglected to notice that I had used the word "alone" twice instead of rhyming it with another word. In my own work, I consider that to be inexcusable.

If possible, I would like to amend the verse to read:

Now he always wakes his folks up; They won't let him eat alone. Gen'ral Mills sent him a case of Cheerios. Though he never asked permission When he drove away from home, On TV he came up smellin' like a rose.

Normally I don't care to cheat by rhyming words that end with "n" and those that end with "m", but since Mr. Joel did so in the original song of which this is a parody, I felt it was appropriate.

Please forgive me for being so eager to respond to your challenge that I submitted such sloppy work. I hope you will think kindly of me as a "first-timer" and overlook my glaring error.

With best regards,
SharonA