What you have written hits me in a number of ways - first because I've always fought the concept that "growing up" means having to give up the wonder of childhood - the ability to suspend disbelief; or conversely the ability to believe

secondly because a significant fraction of my income comes from a job stongly enhanced BY suspension of disbelief - which just goes to show that the former concept is wrong in at least certain instances...

magic=imagination=suspension of disbelief

"Truth" doesn't always equal "fact" - and is malleable; give 12 people the same "facts" about a controversial issue and you are likely to come up with a minimum of two "truths" - more likely 10 or 12!

In medicine, in psychology it has been shown that belief or the suspension of disbelief can make a difference - sometimes slight - sometimes vast.

Any-hoo; I LIKE {okay - closer to "love it!" - but the point being it is an emotional reaction not a reasoned one) it as it stands -and for numerous reasons it speaks to me and resonates with me; but yes, it would probably be better if it could be resolved somehow - a reason or statement of why the magic shouldn't be left behind. (Other then it is fun)

I think possible make your last little "verselet" into a chorus of sorts? But not necesarily after EVERY verse. And possibly put it at the beginning? It be cleaner to resolve if the "conflict" gets stated right at the beginning.

"yust my tinkin' on it"

YMMV

MMario