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Thread #53293 Message #824308
Posted By: CapriUni
12-Nov-02 - 01:08 PM
Thread Name: Winter Solstice Carol from CapriUni
Subject: RE: Winter Solstice Carol from CapriUni
at some point you have to call a job done and I think when the music and midi came out it was done
Okay, Mary!
(you know, I was just giving that exact same advice to someone else not too long ago... I just need to learn to take it ;-))
I do suggest, however, for those who want, or need, to drop a syllable from the last line, to drop "sweet", rather than the "-es" from "voices".
So the last line is:
"So raise up your voices, let songs fill the air",
with the melody line: E, D, C, D, F, E, D, C, D, B, C.
I'm a spoken word writer first, and nothing makes me climb the wall faster than an unneeded shift into or out of the plural.