Marc, your ABC sounds perfectly good to me. Congratulations.

The tune sounds similar to one I know as "Belfast Town". If you look in this thread you will find a lot of discussion about that tune and other songs that use it, such as "The Dolphin".

Your tune is in 6/8 and the ABC Belfast posted there is in 3/4, but I think you'll agree they are closely related.

WassaiL! V